Rock. That was his name. No-one ever knew him and they probably won’t. But why should they? Shyness covered most of his personality, so there is actually no point in meeting him! However, there is more to him then you think. Obviously he is a rock but can’t Rock have a life?
Rock was an altruistic creature, he cared for everyone. His face however, you cannot describe very well… His eyebrows were stone caterpillars never moving; ever. The hands of this monster were always dry and rough. Nobody cared for him. If they did, they couldn't - it’s quite hard caring for a muscular creature, whose weight was more than 7 tonnes! Rock’s nose was a giant potato, a fossilized one. The smile of this living thing was broken. Whenever you see him smile, you see cracked tombstones, struggling to stay still.
Even though… (let’s say) Rock has ugly features, you cannot say that about his personality. Despite Rock’s heart being made out of stone, it is full of pure kindness. He is lonely though. Living - all alone - without anyone. He has wonderful thoughts and dreams but they never come true until the next day…
Wow!!! er... I'm not sure who wrote but it is great! Great use of ellipsis and dashes.
ReplyDeleteWell Done :-)
Tick: Great use of similes. (TIa)
ReplyDeleteTick: I liked how you incorporated feelings. (Ribu)
Wish:Adding more adverbs (Georgia)
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