500 word challenge

6R have been working on their 500 word stories for the BBC Radio 2 competition. Here is the first part of Madison's writing - what features can you identify?

As you silently creep towards an abandoned, antiquated cottage in the far away woods, the branch of a dead tree screeches in agony while it falls to the ground. You open the creaking, wooden door. Standing still as a statue, you wait for any booby traps to pop out in front of you. No traps await you, so you continue your quest. The first room looks as if a bomb has gone off; it is unbelievably messy: glass is shattered everywhere; cobwebs hang from almost every single crumbling corner. You stagger amongst the sharp shards of glass and you discover another door; it is a metallic colour with a stiff handle and mostly all of the screws have been yanked out of it.