Amidst the
realm of the almighty and omnipotent Zeus, there lived two unique siblings
(Prometheus and Epimetheus). Prometheus, whom Zeus had demanded to create
humankind, cherished his humans! However, this infuriated Zeus! “Prometheus,
that scoundrel of a titan, has been creating mayhem again! Not only has he
insulted me by foolishly fashioning those feeble humans to look like gods, but he has now
stolen fire for them from MY Mount Olympus!” Quivering with rage, an ominous lightning bolt
struck the sky…
I am so proud of the huge progress in your writing, Gabriela. I am particularly impressed by your use of adjectival phrases, such as almighty and omnipotent.
ReplyDeleteWell done Gabriela - great narrative writing! 6F thought the varied punctuation and adverbial phrases such as: 'with rage' made it particularly effective. As a next step, we thought maybe the addition of a well chosen metaphor could have helped the description.
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