This week in 5E, we have adapted our narratives from last week's stories to create our own original writing based in Pompeii.
Below is Yeganeh's work. Her current target is to use varied vocabulary. Can you spot which words she upleveled to be more powerful?
The year was 70AD and the streets of Pompeii bustled as if the world was going to end. Shoppers wrestled for bargains while weary, ragged slaves searched for nourishing water. Marcus, a frail fragile young slaveboy, slinked his way through the boiling streets to pick up his spiteful master's laundry. However, the ground began to violently shake and quake. Narrowly avoiding being hit by a marble dedication to Achilles, Marcus tumbled to the cold, hard ground. Shattering stones and crumbling glass scattered around, pounding into Marcus' eats; deafening him for minutes.
Well done Yeganeh. I can see that you have attempted to use a greater range of more powerful and varied verbs and adjectives. Why is it not appropriate to describe the boy as, 'a frail fragile young slaveboy'?
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