This week, 6R have been have been learning about journalistic writing and producing our own newspaper article. Here is Maya's.
Burglars steal
from the elderly
By Maya _______
An elderly couple’s home was broken into in the early
hours yesterday morning, despite the recent installation of a new
state-of-the-art burglar alarm.
The couple, who have
lived in their vast, semi-detached house for over fifty years, were the victims
of yet another in a series of attacks in their area. Whilst the couple slept,
the callous burglars- believed by the police to be a group of experienced youths-
entered the property through a window smashing it completely. Having thieved a
significant amount of money raised for a campaign nearby along with a necklace
known to worth £2000, they made a swift exit through the window they had
broken, after they were disturbed by the alarm of the neighbour’s dog.
A passer-by indicated that the attack happened in the early
hours of yesterday morning, Monday 19th January 2015, approximately
between 1.am and 3.am as a witness passed the house two times after a party, at
1.am when all was presumably fine and once at 3.am when she had heard a lot of
voices and movement in the house. Following their usual routine, the couple,
(who retired to bed at 11.am) went to sleep after news on BBCHD. Extremely
anxious about their security, both husband and wife, systematically secured
each door and window before activating their recently installed
state-of-the-art burglar alarm after worries of burglaries in their area. The
residents have confirmed to the police that the routine was followed: however
the mystery to why the alarmed failed is still undiscovered.
Mr and Mrs Smith, of 48 Beechwood Avenue , Watford, have
lived in their property for all of their married life. Situated at the end of
the road, the house has an extensive rear garden and front, with two garages
which is overlooking a golf course a couple of metes away. Mr and Mrs Smith
chose the house because of the unlikeliness of the burglaries and targeted
crimes.
Sally Smith, aged 78, and her husband, Jay Smith, aged 81, were
both equally devastated upon waking the next morning to find their home had
been ransacked.
“We are extremely distraught,” wept Sally. “We were aware of
our local area being burgled but never thought we would. We have spent so much
time each day, before bed ,making sure all our doors and windows are secure and
activating our alarm. I am utterly
devastated .”
Police and forensic investigators were searching for evidence
at the house. Although not confirmed, a source from the police station revealed
two sets of fingerprints had been found. Police are refusing to answer any
questions from the press.
Witnesses in the area at the time of the crime have provided
useful information towards catching the criminals. CCTV cameras, installed a
few months ago, caught three men, all in dark trousers and jumpers with
luminous Nike trainers, running away from the property around 2.55am.
Police records reveal that this burglary is the fifth in
North Watford. Recent studies show that elderly people are becoming main targets
of such break-ins, due to their age and physical abilities as well as valuable
possessions.
Mr and Mrs Smith are currently staying in a nearby hotel
until their home is secure once more. Residents of the neighbourhood fear they
will be the next target and have been forced to find extra security. Police
continue to investigate.
I am impressed by your use of drop-in clauses Maya and the range of punctuation you have used. Remember to proof read your work to ensure that you have accurately used commas to mark clauses.
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