We have been continuing to look at newspaper reports in Year 5 this week. We have just finished writing a newspaper article based on Jim's dramatic escape from the workhouse. Below is Alfie's report:
Rogue orphan escapes death-trap workhouse
By Alfred Washington
During the late hours of Saturday, an impoverished orphan,
supposedly named Jim Jarvis, escaped from the most spacious workhouse in
London.
Immediately the
Matron reported that: “Although lots of labourers escape, they always get caught
and whipped. However, Jim was not caught!” she bellowed, ad added: “I never liked him.”
Last night, we can only imagine the the walking igloo rolled down the littered,
frozen, ice-rink streets of London, given that this the month had been a chilling November of
shuddering bodies.
On the other hand, in the workhouse, it appears to be a
megladon with the amount of body parts being lost because of the machines. The workhouse
is like a death trap.
Furthermore, another concern has arisen: why was Jim so
enamoured to leave the only building in which he could eat and lie on a bed ? That is
a question you have to answer! Send a
letter to 9 Vicarage Way in London to try and guess.
Meanwhile, we hope the eternal future will enfold good luck
for the young lad. We will keep you updated whatever the weather brings to us.
I really like the range of sentence types that you have used in your newspaper report. I am impressed that you are attempting to use a range of adventurous adjectives, but ensure that they are used appropriately.
ReplyDeleteWe really enjoyed reading your report. We particularly enjoyed your use of time connectives and that you used lots of different punctuation. Next time make sure you proof read your work to ensure that it makes sense.
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