This week we have been learning how to create an effective character description. Below is an extract from our shared writing, have a read and let us know what you think!
She was above all a most respectable female. Unbelievably, she had once been a singer in a band, and you could still hear the enchanting tone of her melodies when she hummed in the mornings. As she glided through the flowers and trees her dainty shoulders swayed to and fro without her noticing. He fragile arms hung like weeping willows and rocked slowly in the breeze. Patched up with a plaster on her left knee, her snowy legs looked as if they hadn't seen the sun in a while.
Looking at her you got the feeling that this was someone who could lull tiny animals into the palm of her comforting hands. He face, no doubt, was a work of fine art, a joy to behold. She had a peachy chin, a compassionate mouth and large sparling eyes.
As for her clothes... they were, to say the least, conventional, but when she wore them they sprung to life. She always had on a lavender blouse, which made the green fleck in her eyes pop. Fastened down the middle by pearlescent buttons, her knee length skirt swooshed as she walked. On her feet she wore flowery sandals. She looked, in short, more like a pixie than a teacher. She was youthful and glowing yet was wise beyond her years.
By All of 6B
Which well known book character could we be describing?
I really like the adjectives, such as pearlescent and compassionate, and verbs, such as glided, that you have carefully chosen to build an effective character description. Is it a description of Miss Honey?
ReplyDeleteThank you for a great blog read, 6B!
ReplyDeleteOur two ticks from 5E are:
- Exciting punctuation. We especially enjoyed your ellipses.
- "Pearlescent". What a beautiful word choice.
Our one wish would be:
- A relative clause to further add to the description. We've been a fan of them since learning about them last week!
Thank you!
5E