This week Year 5 have been looking at newspaper reports. We have written articles from the viewpoint of a Victorian reporter describing the escape of Jim Jarvis from the workhouse. We have been focusing on our connectives and generalisers!
Orphan pulls off audacious workhouse escape!
Last night a famished boy executed an escape from the indomitable workhouse, a remarkable feat. Jim Jarvis, a resident of the wretched workhouse, was nowhere to be found at bedtime. Panic-stricken, the matron and overseers craned their heads all over the workhouse but there was no sign of the missing boy.
Tip, another dejected inhabitant of the large monolith, reluctantly divulged further details.
"We were carrying heavy burdens of carpets into the frozen yard when abruptly, Jim turned to me with a gleam in his eye. Then he scanned the bleak grey surroundings and darted for the steel gates'.
Although it appears that Tip is Jim's only friend, he did not join his friend in the daring escape, being too fearful of the consequences if caught. As this is a particularly cold November, it may be that the weather also gave him a reason to be wary of stepping out of the confines of the workhouse.
Whilst Jim is reportedly an orphan, it is believed that he has sisters still living and that this escape may be an attempt to reunite with them. The public is urged to contact the workhouse with any details of the boy and his whereabouts should they happen to see him. He is described as being short, with ribs visible through his clothes, and dirty brown hair.
Alex, 5G
:O This a great article Alex! I really enjoyed mostly your time connectives and other connectives! Good job Alex!
ReplyDeleteWow! This is a fantastic newspaper report. I am particularly impressed by the powerful verbs and adjectives that you have used. Also, I like the way you have incorporated a quote to include additional information. Keep up the great work!
ReplyDelete6F really liked the use of drop-in clauses to add extra information in this report. In addition, we thought that the 5Wsin the orientation made for a sophisticated news report and adjectives such as: dejected and audacious.
ReplyDeleteHowever, our next step would be to maybe reduce the number of adjectives I the first paragraph to enhance the flow.