Hackney, London
Dear Matron,
I am writing this letter as a plea for you to consider
letting me leave this miserable workhouse. It is like hell on earth. Although I
should be grateful that you have put a shelter over my head, I cannot spend
another sleepless night of fear and terror here. As the cold, misty nights turn
into long, bleak days, I regularly question how long it has been since I
arrived through the doors of this soul-destroying prison. Maybe it has been a
month. Maybe a year. It feels like a lifetime. If I stay much longer my future
is doomed.
The workhouse is unbearable. Every time tears flood my eyes,
I get whipped with a belt. It is like lightening striking my body. The food is
horrendous, even the thought of it makes me heave. I am living in a nightmare,
the fear and terror flooding my mind like the deep, dark, Atlantic Ocean.
I am only in the
workhouse because my beloved family have all deceased. Living on the rough, bustling
streets of London, without a penny to my name, I had no other choice but to
steal. I was ravenous. One single waft of the sweet smelling bread from the bakery.
I could not resist! My stomach was crying out, wild with hunger! Unfortunately,
one day I was caught by the bobbies and forced into this treacherous workhouse.
I beg you, with all my heart, to take your time to consider
letting me leave. I am asking in desperation. Please let me walk to freedom so
I can hear the cries of the city again.
Yours Sincerely,
Spinly
Thomas, 5C
This is a very emotive letter Thomas. I am impressed by your use of figurative language and a range of sentence types.
ReplyDeleteI really like how you used ambitious vocabulary. Keira (3B)
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Well done for using the structural features of a letter (e.g. salutation and signoff). We were also impressed by your choice of adjectives (e.g. treacherous) and use of varied sentence length for effect. To improve your writing further, we thought you could use more adverbs and a wider range of punctuation.
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