Friday, 17 October 2014

A Fairytale Article by Madison, 5G

Rumple Takes Golden Prize, Ariel Devastated

Fairyland has talent has concluded with a spectacular bang! The two final competitors battled it out over three long lasting rounds with Rumpelstiltskin startling the audience by spinning glimmering gold into phenomenal shapes and agile Ariel performing a stunning swimming display. In addition to his breathtaking glistening gold shapes Rumpelstiltskin told a variety of riddles leading the judges to choose him. 

Rumpelstiltskin spoke to us just after the announcement.
'I just couldn't believe it, I expected to hear nothing but rubbish remarks but instead saw the colossal trophy heading my way!' he exclaimed in shock. He also said that he would like to open his own gold shop with his winnings. 

Despite being the cruel wicked witch of the west, one judge even gave Rumpelstiltskin a congratulatory hug. Rumpelstiltskin has also won the chance to tour the land with past winners, the Fairy Godmother and Cinderella whom he hopes will provide the transport. 

Unfortunately Ariel did not take losing particularly well and spent the majority of the after party sobbing into her runner up's silver cup. She declined to comment. The Daily News wishes her well and sends it congratulations to Rumpelstiltskin. 

By Madison, 5G

4 comments:

  1. I love the use of humour within your newspaper article Madison. Also, I am impressed with your attempt to use a greater range of connectives within your writing. Remember to re-read your work and ensure you have included commas to separate clauses.

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  2. Wow! We really enjoyed your article.

    :) We really liked that you used lots of different punctuation.
    :) We also liked that you used some examples of sophisticated connectives.

    It would be even better if next time you use a rnage of sentence lengths.

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  3. Hmmm wow Madison! Great article i am impressed of your clauses!

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  4. Wow Madison, I was impressed of how you got a quote in there.Well done.

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