LI: To use features of atmospheric writing.
Still half-deaf from the booming bomb, he lay there. The noise was still ricocheting to and fro in the tunnel walls and buzzing in his ear. Dourly, he thought about his only way out, avalanched by mud. Waves of horror and fright paralysed his body. His eyes widened. Fighting desperately for his limbs to work, he found miracles don't happen. Silence filled the air. Life slowly died away.
Millie 6B
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I am impressed with your atmospheric writing Millie. I particularly like your use of powerful verbs and adverbs.
ReplyDeleteThis is excellent Millie! 5G were particularly impressed by your use of varied sentence length for effect. Your choice of language was very powerful and gave us goosebumps!
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