6B Narrative Writing

This week in 6B we completed our own short narrative about a soldier in WW1. Our narrative has three sections: the calm beginning, the change point and the action. Read our example and see if you can pick out these pivotal moments in the text.


 There was a full moon, the brightest he had ever seen. The barrel of Paul's Bolt-Action riffle glistened. He was thinking, as he always did, whilst the other soldiers chatted. Feeling cramped because he only just managed to fit in the communications trench, he began to write home. Sucking the end of his pen, he talked gibberish to a general expelling froth as he opened his mouth. His scruffy hair limited his vision and this annoyed him. He thought war would be fun, what it was like on the 'Your Country Needs You' posters. He didn't know about the shells, the grenades or the flares.


Silently creeping, he ventured out to the front line. Soldiers each found a place on a firing step. Paul rested his round face onto the trench wall, closed his medium eyes and big mouth. Suddenly roars went overhead. Paul saw shells, squadrons upon squadrons of them. Paul realised that if there were shells up ahead then there was danger too. The Germans were coming...


Everybody loaded their guns for the worst battle yet. There was the first wave of the bayonets, but worst of all... a grenade had been thrown into the saturated trench.
"Take cover lads!" a gruff voice yelled. The grenade exploded. Everything fell silent. An object fell on Paul's shoulder, it was cold. He looked on his shoulder. It was a hand, a cold, wet severed hand. He looked behind him and there were debris and equipment everywhere.


His comrades were dead and the German snipers were approaching with their tactical weapons and beady eyes. Paul heard shuddering. Only the machine gunner survived. It was down to him and Paul...


By Eric, 6B