In the night sky,
Malicious Mars stomps and stares.
He is fiery red with anger,
And will kill you with his glares.
In the night sky,
Venus swiftly swirls.
She is tranquil and sympathetic,
And keeps peace between the worlds.
By Elliott, Liam, Ben, May and Hudhaifa
Wow, 5C! We really enjoyed reading your poem. We thought you used rhyme really effectively, along with personification and alliteration. We also liked the repetition to structure the verses. Well done!
ReplyDelete6F really enjoyed the repetition of the line In the night sky as well as the powerful verbs that personified the planets. Our next step would be to maybe experiment with some onomatopoeia.
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