Charlie and the Great Glass Elevator - Narrative Writing by 5G

This week in Year 5 we have been re-telling the story of Charlie and the Great Glass Elevator. Here is an extract from our shared writing as a class. We hope you enjoy it!

Charlie Bucket was an ordinary boy to whom the most extraordinary things happened. Mere hours after being told he was to inherit Willy Wonka's legendary chocolate factory; he found himself hurtling through the skies in an elevator to collect his family, accompanied by none other than Mr Wonka himself. It was an exhilarating ride!

They landed with a bump in the living room of Charlie's tiny, bedraggled house to be greeted by the astonished stares of Charlie's parents and three, bed-ridden grandparents.
'I have the most unbelievably amazing news' he exclaimed as he exited the elevator excitedly. 
'Spit it out then', replied Grandma Georgina rudely.
'We are all going to live in Mr Wonka's factory, he says I am going to take over from him one day!' 
A beatific beam spread across his face as he spoke.

Unsurprisingly, this announcement was greeted by a great deal of joy and excitement, followed by a rather heated debate about how, exactly, the bed-ridden grandparents were to be transported to said factory. After eventually agreeing that the enormous, unweildy bed could be squashed into the elevator, they set off. They had not got very far however, when Grandma Georgina began to panic in a most obnoxious way.

'This man is cracked! He's as crazy as a teapot, as loopy as a broomstick!' she shrieked as the elevator rose higher and higher into the brilliant, azure sky. The sun was winking off the glass walls of the elevator as they ascended, and even Charlie and Grandpa Joe began to feel a little concerned...