This week, 6R have been writing the final diary entry of the character Private Charlie Peaceful. Here is a section of Madison's.
The only good thing about my life now is that soon, in about two minutes, this hell on earth will be over. The tide of fear that had come over me is ebbing away slowly. Thoughts of my dear Molly and baby Tommo fill my head. I truly hope that this death won't be as futile as I think it'll be. I really hope that after this war no human will ever have to see such sights. My last drops of energy are going to be spent on love not hatred because if this war has taught me one thing, hatred is all too costly for us soldiers.
Wow Maddison I was very impressed when I read it! I hope to hear more from you.
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This is a very emotive piece of writing Madison and I greatly enjoyed reading it. I was particularly impressed with your use of figurative language.
ReplyDeleteWell done Madison I really enjoyed your piece of work and I could emphasize with charlie as I read this from demi(6f)
ReplyDeleteWe loved reading Madison's writing in 5E. Our two ticks and a wish are:
ReplyDelete- Use of "tide of fear" to convey emotion.
- Powerful verb "ebbing".
Our wish could be:
- Uplevel words such as "good" to make the writing even more powerful.
Many thanks from 5E!
Wow Madison. I am impressed by the way you have used adverbs such as truely and your connectives such as because.
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