Monday, 24 November 2014

6B Explanation Texts

Today 6B wrote a report about trench foot, an awful disease that soldiers contracted during WW1.


Here is an extract from Regan's work.


How do soldiers contract trench foot?
Trench foot is a condition that effects soldiers who were in WW1, WW2 and the Vietnam War. This condition is also known as hyperhidrosis and is normally most severe during the winter months. Is affects people when they have been outside for a long period of time. Although it is most commonly related to World War One, it was first recorded in 1812 by Napolian's army, nearly one hundred years before the Great War.


What are the symptoms?
Despite this being a dreadful disease, it isn't fatal. Commonly, your feet go numb and not long after the feet turn red - erythrosis-  or blue  - cyanosis. Also the sufferers develop a decaying odour, where they smell foul. Sometimes the soldier's feet became so swollen and engulfed with blisters that they couldn't take their boots off! In the worst case scenarios trench foot led to the casualties needing to have their feet amputated.



2 comments:

  1. Well done regan ! i like the way you have replaced the commas in the drop in clause and put in some dashes. I also like the way you have used connectives such as depite.you could include the napolione war as well . In 6F we have also said that it is caused in festivals such as leeds and abbots. Once again well done regan !!!

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  2. Well done Regan! I am impressed with the range of sophisticated connectives that you have used and the vast array of facts that you have included.

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