Friday, 28 November 2014

5G's Narrative Writing Inspired by Charlie and the Great Glass Elevator

This week we have used the original story of Charlie and the Great Glass Elevator to inspire us to write our own versions of the text. Instead of landing on the Space Hotel and meeting the Knids, we have created our own planets and aliens and told our own adventure story! This is an extract from Kristian's narrative.

'Where are we?!' cried Grandma Josephine.
'Now look what you've done,' Mr Wonka retorted, 'We're in space!'
Charlie stared out of the window at the vast blackness of the sky. It was an extraordinary sight, there were stars everywhere and the planets seemed to line up from biggest to smallest. 

An hour later, they saw a planet which did not appear on the charts of the Solar System. No one had ever seen it before. 
'Where are we? What is this planet?' Charlie asked Mr Wonka.
'I don't know,' he replied. As it turns out, it was the planet Brazian. They landed on its strange surface and began to explore. There were curious trees of fire and volcanoes rose up from the ground like great furnaces of light and heat. Fire dripped down their sides. At the bottom of a valley lay a fiery ocean of boiling water, if they had stepped in it, they would have been burnt!

'We've discovered a new planet!' Mr Wonka gasped, staring around in wonder at the sight spread out before them. 

2 comments:

  1. Wow! I love this extract from your narrative Kristian. I am particularly impressed by your use of a range of synonyms for said.

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