This week in Year 5 we have been continuing our journey in space through the eyes of Roald Dahl. We have rewritten the opening of Charlie and the Great Glass Elevator.
Below is Katie's narrative, which is describing the moment when Charlie entered the Space Hotel:
They were feeling anxious and worried; nervous that just ahead of them they could see the mammoth Space Hotel shaped like a diamond. Carefully, Grandpa Joe attached their shimmering glass elevator to the humongous Space Hotel. Suddenly, inside the hotel - FLASH! - down like a lightening bolt, the Knids appeared.
What an improvement in your writing Katie! I am particularly impressed by your use of -ly openers and powerful adjectives. I can't wait to read the rest of your narrative.
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