This week in Year 5, we have continued to study space and Charlie and the Great Glass Elevator. We wrote character descriptions for the wonderful Willy Wonka. Here is Ashiq's:
The enthusiastic Willy Wonka wears a plum velvet jacket whilst his Oompa Loompa assistants fondly dance and sing. He is as smart as Albert Einstein, although his ideas are as mad as a hatter. The recent owner of the famous chocolate factory, Charlie Bucket, admires Willy's out of this world actions. Mr Wonka loves to sample his delightful treats and care tenderly for his minion assistants.
Well done Ashiq. I can see that you are trying hard to include appropriate adjectives and adverbs within your writing.
ReplyDeleteWe enjoyed reading your character description Ashiq!
ReplyDeleteYour two ticks include: use of a simile (mad as a hatter) and use of a drop in clause. Next time try to vary your sentence openers.